persuasive writing

In Te Maunga we have been learning to write a persuasive writing to Mrs Lindsay. I did well is finishing my writing in one day. To make my writing better is add more writing so my writing is exciting to read. Mrs Lindsay is Paihia Schools awesome principal.
                                                         
                                                              here is my writing

Dear Mrs Lindsay,

I am talking to you today because I think the school should have this awesome Maths Hub website at Paihia School.  It helps us find activities to our goals, it is easy to use and very clear to see. It will help teachers save time for other school work. I am very excited for you to get this maths hub website

It can help our learning more if we have that maths hub website. It will help our learning by finding activities that we need to learn and it has videos that we can watch.

It saves time for the teachers to work on other things for the school. Also if we don’t have it we won’t be learning as well as we should or we can’t progress in maths. It will help us find things to help us achieve our goals. It will also be very helpful for the whole school because it has the activities for us to learn.  

It is easy to use and It is clear to see. It is the same as our I can’s and it is not confusing for us.

It helps the teachers find activities for our goals and we don’t have to sit on the mat and wait for the teacher to tell us what we have to do for maths. We can find the website really quick too.

That's why I think Paihia School should have this website.  Don’t you want to help out the school? So please can you get that website for Paihia School we would really appreciate

it if you do.

Thank you Mrs Lindsay.

From Anyah